Learning Analysis

My Learning Analysis essay started with just vignettes that were put into the later essay. Here are the vignettes:

Vignettes+1st

It was a nice starting point and exercise in narrowing down longer stories into a short paragraph. This condensing of stories was what I had to do either way later on

After the Vignettes came the draft and peer review

Here are some photos of my initial Learning Analysis essay draft with peer review comments:

Review Notes: Interesting take; Very clear and descriptive; How did you notice this? What stopped you from continuing your habit?; I don’t understand how the example has to do with pressure, what kind? Maybe focus on the hardship, not pressure.
Review notes: A bit confused, did the overexertion cause the injury or the other way around?; Similie!; The lesson about uncontrollable situations fits, but maybe show that the dog’s behavior and situation was something you couldn’t control. ; Put also since you used that exact line in the first paragraph.
Review notes: Good question can be applied to real life. When do you know it’s time to look for help?; (Idea) Knowing when to stop could connect to persistence. ;Personal Opinion: Try going for something less elementary, not just restating (Overall, to tie everything together).; I agree and really like this ending line

From this person’s peer review, I got a sense of what parts worked well/had an impact, and what parts were weaker or needed improvement. I honestly felt the same way about how my peer commented on places of confusion such as on the second paragraph and found their questions a good guide as to what I should consider for my final version.

After the draft which was honestly me winging it, came the outline assignment I don’t normally do outlines but here it is: LA Outline Chaira

The outline is pretty basic in my opinion but at least it gave me a ‘track’ as to how to format the final essay.

After the draft, revisions, and outline finally came the final version: The Past Molds the Present and Future

While I definitely feel an improvement from my draft, I felt as if I removed a lot of personality from it that I put into my draft. But I think it all came out well in the end. The biggest problem for me is making it sound less repetitive now that I am rereading this essay retrospectively. This entire Learning Analysis essay and its processes was like a primer for what was to come later: The Historiography.